Question : Can you please correct my grammar? Thanks.?
My name is Patrick and international model. Born in stockholm(Sweden). My father is from sweden and my mother is born In thailand.I have Burmese and Indian Blood from my grandparents side.Grew up in stockholm as a very naughty kid with two sisters that stands very close to me. I was very active in many sports such as Skate Boarding ,Soccer, Ice Hockey and climbing tree’s... I spend my Teens on the west coast(Gothenburg) in Sweden with my father I love very much. I’m currently now traveling the modeling industry all over the world since the past 5-6 years. Have worked very well in the markets I’ve been too and created a significant numbers of fans and followers. Which really stands close to my heart. Currently based in Mumbai (India) since 2 years ago. Setting up my own modeling agency >ribbmodels in India and some other projects around that. I’m also working on my own Brand “UNIVERSAL PLAYER”. Which is being promoted via my blog online.Traveling in the fashion Industry for the past years, have thought me a lot about People, Cultures, Food, History, Fashion, Businesses, Marketing etc, and what I want to achieve in life. I feel very privileged to have this opportunityto work with some of the best people in the fashion Industry and can’t get enough of it... I’m also very engaged to my friends around the world especially the ones I love dearly..Some of my future plans are to make this world a better place. At least try to, before I die.I Love a happy, easy, going life with a lot of colors in it. Appreciate all kinds of sexes and personalities. Always traveling and looking to create new interesting contacts with people from all over the world related to Fashion.Maybe you one of them ?
- asked by mbm
All Answers:
Answer #1
What exactly is the question?
- answered by Maricely
Answer #2
Have worked very well in the markets I've been TO. Include the word I in your sentences. Don't say "Born in Stockholm." That's an incomplete sentence and you have a few of them in there. Say, I SPENT my teen years on the west coast...For the past 6 years, I have traveled in the modeling industry.The last sentence is incomplete, put a comma before "which"There are a few other errors with sentence structure but those are the ones I see off the bat.
- answered by amcfan84
Answer #3
I don't see any problem with your English...
- answered by Angel J
Answer #4
My name is Patrick, born in Stockholm, Sweden and an international model. My father is from Sweden and my mother is from Thailand. My grandparents have Burmese and Indian Blood. I grew up in Stockholm as a very naughty kid with two sisters who are very close to me. I am very active in many sports such as Skate Boarding ,Soccer and Ice Hockey.I also like climbing trees... I spent my teenage years on the west coast wish is the Gothenburg in Sweden with my father whom I love very much. I've been in the international modeling industry for 5-6 years. I have worked very well in the said industry. I’ve created a significant number of fans and followers who really stand close to my heart. I've been based in Mumbai for two years and currently setting up my own modeling agency for Indian rib models and other projects related to that. I also work for my own Brand, UNIVERSAL PLAYER, which is being promoted through my blog. Being in the fashion Industry for the past years has taught me a lot about People, Cultures, Food, History, Businesses, Marketing, and others but most especially fashion. These are what I want to achieve in life. I feel very privileged to have this opportunity to work with some of the best people in the fashion Industry and I just can’t get enough of it... I’m also very engaged to my friends around the world especially the ones I love dearly..Some of my future plans are to make this world a better place. At least I try to make it before I die.I love a happy and an easygoing life with a lot of colors in it. I appreciate all genders and personalities. I always travel and look for interesting contacts from all over the world who are into fashion.Maybe you are one of them !
- answered by i go loony
Answer #5
No, sorry, just too much there to glom onto and didn't notice many (if any) errors, anyway.
- answered by Ben
Answer #6
two sisters with whom I have a very close relationship.The standing close phrase must be a Swedish idiom that doesn't translate.
- answered by 1010girl
Answer #7
After every periods there are always 2 spaces, also names of cities and countries are always capitalized. You use "very" too much.I was born in Stockholm, Sweden. My parents are from Sweden and Thailand, grandparents were from Burma and India. I grew up in Stockholm as a naughty kid with two sisters who were very close to me. I was active in skate boarding, soccer, ice hockey and climbing trees. My teenage years were spent with my father on the west coast in Gothenburg, Sweden. The last six years I have been traveling the world, the past two have been in Mumbai, India where I have created a large fan following in the modeling industry. I have started my own agency called, "Ribbmodels" and am currently promoting my own brand name online called "Universal Player."
- answered by SALSA
Answer #8
My name is Patrick and i am a international model. Born in stockholm(Sweden). My father is from sweden and my mother is born In thailand.I have Burmese and Indian Blood from my grandparents side.Grew up in stockholm as a very naughty kid with two sisters that stands very close to me. I was very active in many sports such as Skate Boarding ,Soccer, Ice Hockey and climbing tree’s... I spend my Teens on the west coast(Gothenburg) in Sweden with my father I love very much. I’m currently now traveling the modeling industry all over the world since the past 5-6 years. Have worked very well in the markets I’ve been too and created a significant numbers of fans and followers. Which really stands close to my heart. Currently based in Mumbai (India) since 2 years ago. Setting up my own modeling agency >ribbmodels in India and some other projects around that. I’m also working on my own Brand “UNIVERSAL PLAYER”. Which is being promoted via my blog online.
- answered by mohammad
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